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The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it unnecessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss these two points of view and give your opinion.

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Education
 has made great progress from the past to the present day.
Nevertheless
, statistics show that
people
's interest in
education
 is increasing rapidly every year. It is true that
education
 means a lot in our modern world.
In addition
,today, the increasing demand for learning
due to
 globalization emphasizes its importance.
Although
this
 matter of
education
 is important for some
people
, it is not important for others, it is left to their personal opinion. The problem with our modern
education
 is still those who think negatively about
education
. On the one hand,
education
 is beneficial for children, but
also
 for humanity.
Moreover
, as some argue, the thoughts of
people
 living in remote parts of the world prove that
education
 is not important. One of the main reasons for
this
 is,
for example
, a different way of thinking and a different outlook. If the
labor
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 capacity of mankind increases, the development potential will
also
 increase.
On the other hand
, I agree that we have several options in terms of alternatives
,
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 because I believe that
education
 is interesting not only for me
,
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 but for everyone. A short experience shows that if we learn about
education
 in detail, we should light the way of
people
 with what we learn. In conclusion, it is confirmed once again that the development of
education
 is a useful alternative for
people
.
In addition
, it is recommended to classify different types of
education
 and it is important for
this
 association.
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