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The maps below show the development of the village of Ryehath between 1990 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the development of the village of Ryehath between 1990 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map portrays the considerable development Ryehath
village
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 went through over a period of 25 years.
Overall
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, it is evident that the rural place was drastically transformed into an urban town setting.
To begin
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 with, the farmland to the north of the
village
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 was modernized into a cafe and a petrol pump.
However
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, the police station at the
center
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 of the
village
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 stayed the same.
Moreover
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, a college was newly constructed beside the primary school which is above the garden in order to meet the educational requirements.
Further
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, another farmland to the south of the
village
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 was destructed and converted into a residential area which had car parking facilities.
In addition
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 to
this
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, the shops beside the abbey road were replaced by the supermarket and the post office.
Nevertheless
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, the windmill remained the same. A bridge was newly constructed over the river so that the people can access the west side of the
village
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. The forest in the west was pulled down, which was replaced by a colony of row houses with a new road constructed in the middle named the cliff road.

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