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The chart below shows a waste collection by a recycling center.

The chart below shows a waste collection by a recycling center.
In the picture, the dynamics of litter collected by
a
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recycling from 2011 to 2015 are shown. The proportion between
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 categories of waste is mainly stable during the observed period.
Paper
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 and glass are
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 most popular materials,
while
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 tins and garden rubbish are the least popular ones. In 2013 there was a minor change as
glass
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 tons
number
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 toppled over the
paper
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number
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. But the next year
paper
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 again became the most common waste in
recycling
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center
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. 
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 contrast to the stable
proportions
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 the absolute
number
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 of materials is actively changing.
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, the
paper
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 tonnage
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dropped
 from 57 to 40 from 2011 to 2013, but after it recovered to 70 tons in 2015. The glass and tins
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 has fluctuated around
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50 and 35 tons correspondingly during the graph period. Garden had
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 surge from 32 to 15 in
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2012, but regained to approximately 30 level during
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the next
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 years. 
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, each kind of material had minimum points in either 2012 or 2013
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 and achieved the maximum
number
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 in 2015.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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