Some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages ?

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Nowadays learning a
language
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is a very controversial topic.
People
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are looking for the best way to learn English.Some
people
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think that it is better for young
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to begin
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learning a different accent at
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first
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academy rather than the second one
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other
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think that learning
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a language
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in a second
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is much better.
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if children start
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early age they can learn faster because their learning capabilities are much more strong. In the earlier ,year children are more likely to learn new things. Their
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strong and fresh. İf they start early they can recognize earlier importance of learning a new
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. In
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school
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they have a lot of free time, in
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free ,time they can learn faster. ,
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younger
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are easy to control and manipulate some experts say that the best age to
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a new
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is 7 to 12 ages. İf they develop a learning
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they can learn more than one different
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.
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learning
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early can have some disadvantages. Earlier
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are learning their mother
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just new. Even if they don't learn their
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accent very well, if they start to learn a new accent they might forget their mother
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. Every citizen must learn their mother
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very well
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later than they can be bilingual or multilingual. In early ,ages peoples are not enough mature to recognize why they learn or what they learn something. As the age increases awareness of
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also
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increases. For ,example in
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,
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the school
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I didn't know what
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am studying or why
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am studying some subject. As I grow I started to recognize something.
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some scientists think that in
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secondary
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learning capabilities can be increased because of the development of the brain. In
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school
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they have been learning something for a
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, and they recognize how to learn something so it can be better to learn in secondary
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. In
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i
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strongly believe that learning
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language
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earlier
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because of the mention
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above. So advantages of learning in primary
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advantages
outweight
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outweigh
the disadvantages of learning in a secondary
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.
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