Nowadays, more and more people are moving from the countryside to cities, which are becoming overcrowded. What are the reasons for this movement to cities and what can be done to reduce it?
People
Change noun form
People's
movement
from the Replace the word
moved
village
to the towns for a long periode
is called Correct your spelling
period
an
urbanisation in sociology term, and Remove the article
apply
this
phenomenon caused the cities
resident getting
Change the verb form
to get
densed
and Correct your spelling
dense
denied
denser
the
other social problems. In Correct article usage
apply
this
essay, I will outline the impetus behind it and the most viable solution.
There are several reasons inducing the resident of village
Correct article usage
the village
move
to Add the particle
to move
city
. Add an article
the city
Cities
promise much more jobs compared to the countryside
, whereby in the village
they have limited jobs with the main livelihood are
livestock and agriculture, Wrong verb form
being
whereas
in the town
they will able to get various subsistence with higher income, for example
working in factory
, selling food and beverage, and opening Add an article
a factory
the factory
business
in small enterprise. Add an article
a business
Moreover
, they Add the particle
towant
want
get a better Correct your spelling
won't
quality
life
through higher education because school and university Change preposition
of life
quality
in city
mostly much Add an article
the city
a city
more
better Change the word
apply
in
the Change preposition
than in
countryside
. On the other hand
, cities
provide various entertainment that cannot be found in the village
so they want
explore Add the particle
towant
city
to enjoy themselves. These Add an article
the city
motive
lead to Fix the agreement mistake
motives
urbanisation
rate in Indonesia Correct article usage
the urbanisation
accounted
for 13,2%.
Wrong verb form
accounting
However
, this
trend sometimes causes many problems in the city
. First,
the town
population become overcrowded due to
people accumulation from various regions which leads to congestion and water scarcity because of overuse. Second,
if they are not equipping themselves with the skills, experiences and expertises
needed to sustain their life, they will become unemployed and increase the poverty rate in the Correct your spelling
expertise
city
, and sometimes they commit criminal acts to obtain money for their survival. Finally
, city
environment will be dirtier since more products are used in the Correct article usage
the city
town
.
To overcome this
problem, government
need to take action to alleviate Add an article
the government
urbanisastion
. Facilitating new factory permits is crucial because they will use more labour from the local resident so they will choose to work in their nearby. Correct your spelling
urbanisation
Then
, stipulating ceiling price
for meats, eggs, rice and other commodity will make villagers much more prosperous. The Fix the agreement mistake
prices
last
one, improvement in education quality
in countryside
will be beneficial Add an article
the countryside
for
the long term, Change preposition
in
along with
construction
of infrastructure.
In conclusion, minimising the gap Add an article
the construction
quality
of education and infrastructure between the countryside
and cities
and stipulating policy
Fix the agreement mistake
policies
making
villagers more prosperous are viable solutions in the Wrong verb form
make
long-term
to decrease urbanisation and various social problem in the Correct your spelling
long term
town
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