the graph below shows the number off shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

the graph below shows the number off shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line chart comprehensively illustrates the
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discontinuations and emerges in seven years from 2011 to 2018. It is evident from the graph that the
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closures and openings of
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exhibited a decreasing pattern over the period shown.
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,
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discontinuations had the lowest
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while
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openings of
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experienced the greatest
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. Around 6500
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were out of business at the beginning of the period. In 2012, the
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closures was recorded at 6000. The quantity increased significantly to 7000 in 2013.
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, the
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dropped dramatically to around 6300 and approximately 500 in 2014 and 2015, respectively. The following year, the
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discontinuations significantly soared to just above 5000. The
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closures dropped slightly to 5000 in 2017 and surpassed just above 5000
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of the duration. Around 8500
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emerged in 2011.
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, the
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had a significant decrease in 2012 to 4000. After that, the
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inclined significantly to 5000 and 6000 in 2013 and 2014, respectively. The quantity of
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openings decreased to 4000 and
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levelled off in 2017.
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of the period, the
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emerging
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declined to 3000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, store with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 10 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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