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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that
professionals
 are supposed to serve the
country
 that provides training courses for them.
However
, there are opposing ideas stating that they should have the freedom to choose their working place.
This
 essay will shed light on both views and I believe that
such
people
 should not be obliged to
work
 in the nation where they are trained.
On the other hand
, there are many reasons why
people
 assume that the
country
 in which
professionals
 are trained needs to be similar to their working one. The first reason is that the training sessions they have done might be appropriate for working in that
country
.
Therefore
, when they complete the sessions, it would be easier to land a job if they choose to
work
 for the
country
. Another reason is that these
people
 owe a debt of gratitude to the location of their training.
In particular
, most
professionals
 rely deeply on government resources of the nation at some point,
hence
, staying there to contribute their skills and develop society is completely logical.
On the other hand
, I firmly hold the view that
professionals
 ought to have opportunities to
work
 in the
country
 they wish for.
Firstly
, freedom is the factor determining whether
people
 are satisfied with their professions or not.
Thus
, when they
work
 in their desired location, they could produce better outcomes than those working in an unwanted one.
Furthermore
,
people
 would decide to
work
 in a place providing a higher salary if they are able to choose. As they have a chance to earn more money from their professions, they can considerably improve many aspects of their life. In conclusion, it is understandable that a
country
 should have the contribution of
people
 given training practices there,
however
, it seems to me that they should have no obligation on their choice of working location.
Submitted by dminh on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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