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Many people choose to learn many foreign languges. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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1) It is true that learning
languages
 are preferable for many individuals. In
this
 essay, I will outline the perceived drawbacks and
benefits
 of foreign
languages
 and explain why I feel it has far more significant advantages. It should be acknowledged that learning many foreign
languages
 can offer a number of certain
benefits
 to
people
 one of which is to learn more.
This
 is because it is worldview is improving for life and
people
 want to do more and more to live in a better condition.
This
 can lead to a person will having more opportunities and desire to learn more about other countries and learn more in life. Another advantage of
this
 trend is connected easily to finding a job. The reason is that will be more likely to earn more money because learning many
languages
 helps
people
 both work and earn.
For instance
, translators always have a job and they earn easily and much more than other workers. There are
also
 other
benefits
 learn other
languages
 that are worth mentioning and
this
 is speech becomes fluent because the more a language is learned, the more beautiful speech becomes. It can
also
 lead to changing dreams for the future and not wasting time on empty. Another benefit is combining
people
. Sees the lives of
people
 from other countries and compares them with his own.
People
 need to be useful to others In conclusion, it has some
benefits
such
 as much to learn and more job options, fluency of pronunciation and a gathering of
people
 which more than
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