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Many people these days have computer, laptop and telephone at home for work.Do you think working fron home has more advantage or disadvantage?

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Human activity has seen great progress from the past to the present.
Nevertheless
, statistics show that people's interest in improvement is increasing rapidly every year. It is true that improvement means a lot to free time in our contemporary world. Today, the growing demand for activity
due to
 globalization emphasizes its importance.
This
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the
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nation
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 activity is important for some , but not important for others, it is left to their own personal opinions. The problem with our modern
fre
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free
 time is still those who think negatively about information.
Firstly
 of all, folk
activityit's
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activity's
 good for children and humanity.
Moreover
, as some argue, the thoughts of people ... in remote parts of the world prove that ... is not important. One of the main reasons for
this
 is,
for example
, a different way of thinking and a different outlook. If the labour capacity of humanity increases, the development potential will
also
Secondly
, I agree that we have several options in terms of alternatives because I believe that free time is not only interesting for me but for everyone. A short experience shows that if we study ..., we should shed light on the path of adults and children with what we learn. In conclusion, it is confirmed once again that information is a useful alternative for the development of
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In addition
, it is recommended to classify different types of movement and it is important for association
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