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Many people believe that social network websites such as Facebook and Instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and Society. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, social
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 is apparently considered a bad effect in favour of personality and social life. I personally disagree to some extent, which I will elaborate more on below. On the one hand,
people
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 use social
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 to help them for different purposes.
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, the obvious thing to use social
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 is to engage with other
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 facility, they can have an opportunity to find a new friend and share their story in life. The platforms,
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 as Instagram and Facebook, enable
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 activities. By using those
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, the connection among
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 keeping in touch with them. Another positive point is the
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 provided on social
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 varies enough.
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, sometimes when
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 are scrolling through Instagram they might find
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 about job vacancies. It will benefit
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 who are seeking jobs and are confident by using social
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 can bring positive changes.
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, using social
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 many times would lead to less productivity. It is because
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 tend to love more entertaining
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, they only spend a lot of time with uneducated
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 that make sure the
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 frequently consume.
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,
people
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 who always look for comedy
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 the
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 are open. In conclusion, Indeed, social
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's relationships and obtaining
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 today are not aware towards educated
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 themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • distraction
  • isolation
  • anxiety
  • cyberbullying
  • narcissism
  • catfishing
  • oversharing
  • surveillance
  • detrimental
  • depression
  • loneliness
  • disconnection
  • excessive
  • media consumption
  • authenticity
  • manipulation
  • misinformation
  • filter bubble
  • digital footprint
  • workplace productivity
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