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Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In academic groups, some
people
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 believe that economic
increase
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 will not make that country's citizens happier. But there are
people
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 that oppose
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 idea because they agree that in
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 case, those
people
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's level of life will
increase
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, too.
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, wealthy
countries
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 will be able to have a bigger contribution to medicine, technology, space and other important fields for the human species.
Due to
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 these reasons, I completely oppose
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 idea. First and foremost, the level of life of citizens will
increase
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 and more workplaces will appear.
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 means that number of unemployed
people
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 will decrease.
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, the average amount of salary will
increase
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. As an example, in wealthy
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such
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 as the USA, UAE
people
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 earn much more money compared to not developed and poor
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such
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 as Chad, Syria and etc.
Therefore
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, it will be able easier for
people
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 to realize their ideas, or just travel or buy a house without any mortgage. They will able to study in universities without any student loan which is quite popular among American students.
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,
countries
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 will be able to invest more money in science, medicine, technology and other areas which need development. Thanks to the investments scientists will be able to find cures for lots of diseases.
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, they will be able to improve technology to make
people
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's life much more easier and productive. And one of the most important fields for surviving the human species is space.
People
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 will be able to colonize other planets, too.
To sum up
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, economic
increase
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 for developed
countries
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 will have an impact on every country on Earth because of the technological, space, and medical development. Those developments will help everyone on Earth. But
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, I would like to mention that citizens of wealthy
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 will be happier.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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