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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, some people thought that in order to decrease road
accident
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, we should give fines and punishments to inattentive
drivers
while
 others believed that there are useful methods for safe driving. From my point of view, imposing
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 is definitely beneficial
along with
 additional measures
To begin
 with, careless
drivers
 who ignore traffic
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 are major
contributor
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 to traffic
accident
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accidents
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. To put it another way, they use mobile phones,
while
 driving, which will restrict their attention to roads, signs and pedestrians,
moreover
, they exceed speed,
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 a consequence, when something
happen
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, they can't manage problems.
For
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 reason,
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 has to charge
certain
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 amount of money, suspension of
drivers
's license or even
prison
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 sentence. The aim of
these punishment
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 is to show
drivers
 that their actions have negative consequences,
as a result
, they will avoid making similar mistakes again.
On the other hand
, I believe that there are
another
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 ways to prevent accidents. To be exact, proper training and
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program
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 for people, who are trying to obtain
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a driver
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driver
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license
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 for the first time, will reduce
count
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 of reckless chauffeurs in the future. In the second place, more attention could be paid
in
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 road safety.
For instance
, placing traffic signs, road bumps and bends, security
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 and
speedometer
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 will support safety.
Lastly
, the government should improve and increase public transportation systems,
as a
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 there is
low
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 number of
drivers
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roads
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the roads
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. In conclusion,
while
 punishment can help to prevent bad driving, I believe that there
is
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 other ways to promote safe driving.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • repeat offenses
  • infrastructure improvements
  • public awareness campaigns
  • reckless driving
  • traffic management technologies
  • intelligent traffic lights
  • speed cameras
  • public transportation
  • minimize
  • enhance safety
  • allocate funds
  • road signs
  • road safety
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