Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, some people thought that in order to decrease road
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, we should give fines and punishments to inattentive
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others believed that there are useful methods for safe driving. From my point of view, imposing
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is definitely beneficial
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additional measures
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with, careless
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who ignore traffic
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are major
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to traffic
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. To put it another way, they use mobile phones,
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driving, which will restrict their attention to roads, signs and pedestrians,
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, they exceed speed,
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a consequence, when something
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, they can't manage problems.
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reason,
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has to charge
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amount of money, suspension of
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's license or even
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sentence. The aim of
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is to show
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that their actions have negative consequences,
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, they will avoid making similar mistakes again.
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, I believe that there are
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ways to prevent accidents. To be exact, proper training and
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for people, who are trying to obtain
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a driver
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driver
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license
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for the first time, will reduce
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of reckless chauffeurs in the future. In the second place, more attention could be paid
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road safety.
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, placing traffic signs, road bumps and bends, security
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and
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will support safety.
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, the government should improve and increase public transportation systems,
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result
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there is
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number of
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roads
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. In conclusion,
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punishment can help to prevent bad driving, I believe that there
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other ways to promote safe driving.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • repeat offenses
  • infrastructure improvements
  • public awareness campaigns
  • reckless driving
  • traffic management technologies
  • intelligent traffic lights
  • speed cameras
  • public transportation
  • minimize
  • enhance safety
  • allocate funds
  • road signs
  • road safety
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