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some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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introduction: iNowadays, wherever we go, we face advertisements
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 products. There is an argument about the efficiency of advertising. Some people contend that they are incredibly useful in convincing people to purchase the product,
while
 others believe
due to
 the fact that they are so common people do not care about them anymore. in
this
 essay, I will examine both of these views. In terms of the first thought, I advocate the view that advertising is increasingly becoming more successful for a variety of reasons.
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, owing to their attractive colours and visual features, they are capable of grasping our attention unconsciously
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 when shattered commuters are going across City on the underground, a high-coloured advertisement on the Windows can readily catch the eye.
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, advertisement gets customers the chance of getting aware of the traits of recently-produced products,
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, a new-invented detergent which
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 in cleaning filthy clothes. particularly, for those who are not extroverted and spent most of their time alone they are a good opportunity to catch up on new stuff. With regard to the latter position, I firmly believe
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 some occasions, some sort of advertisements may be boring, most companies have been putting effort into making them more entertaining
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 adding some stunningly beautiful colours and graphics and even fabulous prizes.
Therefore
, even though you occasionally attempt to avoid looking at them as they sound repetitive,
due to
 their eye-catching figures
such
 as included prizes you have to pay attention to them. adding some attractive and psychological items can exert a big influence on individuals. In conclusion, I uphold the view that if advertising is aligned with the psychology of human beings, it can become more successful in its mean.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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