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The given maps provide data on the changes that were occured on the island before and after constructions.

The given maps provide data on the changes that were occured on the island before and after constructions.
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The given maps provide data on the changes that
were
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occured
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occurred
 on the
island
 before and after
constructions
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construction
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.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that in the past
island
 was almost an empty place with no establishments and facilities.
According to
 the map, there were only a few
palma
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palm
 trees with lots of empty space.
Also
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 there
were
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 a beach on the left side of the archipelago. It is noticeable that all trees remained untouched. Around those which were on the left, there were constructed six accommodations for visitors.
On
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 the middle site of
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the island
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island
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,island
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 we can see the building
of
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reception, and behind it there is
restaurant
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a restaurant
the restaurant
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.On the left
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,site
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site
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side
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 there are
also
 lots of numbers of houses for tourists.Footpath and grader
allows
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 people to walk or drive a car.
Furthmore
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Furthermore
, travellers can use ships, because there
were
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was
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cinstructed
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constructed
 a pier.
How
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As
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 we can see from the map,
beach
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the beach
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 at the same place as it was before and tourists are able to swim and take
a
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sunbathe. It is evidence that
island
 became a full-fledged tourist
resor
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resort
 after all changes on it.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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