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Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

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Enormous
people
 believe that the more modern communication develops, the more negative effect will come into society. I totally agree with the given statement
due to
 particular reasons which all will be explained in detail in
this
 essay. In modern times, numerous
devices
 are becoming increasingly commonplace on all continents.
For instance
, both Apple and Microsoft, which lead the world in consumption, have not only brought a lot of opportunities into the world but
also
 society.
Although
people
 tend to take the information that they want to acquire in a just few minutes or seconds, it has affected badly our daily
life
as well as
 social relationships. Many countries like Japan, have laid more emphasis on their technology first
instead
 of enhancing great habitat. From my point of view, before the 2000s century, our
life
 was better than the present time because there weren't any gadgets, electronics, and smart
devices
 in our daily
life
.
Moreover
,
people
 even preferred to read books, play outside, and talk to each other lively.
This
 shows how technological fields are developing at a light speed.
However
, it has made social isolation among individuals because live relationships are dead. One excellent example of
this
 is South Korea, which is the highest suicide country. In Seoul, which is one of the biggest cities in Asia, citizens are more isolated compared to
people
 who live in the countryside. A study shows that living in a big city forms feel alone because all
devices
 are upgraded and don't have to go out to do actions that require physical movements. It means technology improvement causes obesity and sedentary
behavior
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behaviour
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. In conclusion, the only way to reduce the usage of smart
devices
 is to balance work and
life
. If we can do that, everything will be better.
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