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:The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise. Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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It is irrefutable that
overpopulation
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 has become one of the major
problems
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 in today's
world
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.The number of individuals is increasing day by day because of several reasons which will be highlighted in the next paragraphs.
Although
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 rapid
growth
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 in
population
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 is a serious problem,I believe that the weighty issue individuals have faced is not
overpopulation
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. An increase in the number of
people
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 around the globe is happening
due to
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 a number of causes including technological advancement,good financial position and so on.First of all,it is an obvious fact that
people
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 in today's
world
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 are likely to live longer than
people
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 in the past as development in technology allows
people
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 to cure and prevent diseases that are previously untreatable.
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,increased life expectancy helps them to exist longer which causes rapid
growth
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 in
population
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.
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, financial position is in good condition these days, which means that
people
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 are not afraid to have more children.They do not face financial difficulties in bringing up their children since they are paid high salaries. In my opinion,there are more common and topical
problems
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 than
overpopulation
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.
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,climate change is a more prevalent and pressing issue compared to the rapid
growth
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 in
population
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.Climate change is warming faster than past and it is already harming human health, through air pollution,disasters,extreme weather impacts and etc.I guess,global warming adversely affects
people
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 more than
overpopulation
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 does.
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,I do not consider the recent rise in the
world
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's
population
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 to be the most enormous problem in the globe.
To conclude
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, the rapid
growth
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 in the figure of
people
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 is a result of several reasons mentioned above.I hold the opinion,
overpopulation
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 causes many
problems
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,but
this
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 does not mean that it is the biggest issue in the
world
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 as there are other
problems
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 that are more serious.
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