The bar chart gives information about the proportion of children, men and women eating fruit and vegetables daily in the United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008.

The bar chart gives information about the proportion of children, men and women eating fruit and vegetables daily in the United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008.
The bar chart gives information about the proportion of
children
,
men
and
women
eating
fruit
and
vegetables
daily in the United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, it is obvious that the
percentage
of people who ate
fruit
and
vegetables
each
day
was gradual growth. In 2006, the
figure
for
men
and
women
hit the highest and the
percentage
of
men
was higher than that of
children
and
women
who consume
fruit
and
vegetables
every
day
in the UK. In 2001, the proportion of
children
and
men
who ate
fruit
and
vegetables
per
day
stood at 13% and 17% in comparison with 21%that for
men
. Until 2 years, the
percentage
of
children
and
men
remained stable
while
there was a steady increase in the
figure
for
women
of 6%. In 2006, both
children
,
men
and
women
who consume
fruit
and
vegetables
daily rose sharply. The
percentage
of
women
and
offsring
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offspring
offering
reached a peak of 35% in 2006 and 27% in 2006 and 2007 whilst the
figure
for
men
hit the highest point of 26% in 2007. There was a slight fall in the proportion of
women
and
men
eating
fruit
and
vegtables
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vegetables
per
day
in the UK over a
2 year
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period
while
that of
children
went up gradually. In 2008 saw a slight decline
35
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% and 26% in the
figure
for
the
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women
and
men
, which was 2% higher than that
of
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for
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children
.
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