The given chart below illustrates the proportion of individuals of 4 kinds age groups who watched in movie theater in one national European between 2000 and 2011.

The given chart below illustrates the proportion of individuals of 4 kinds age groups who watched in movie theater in one national European between 2000 and 2011.
The given chart below illustrates the proportion of individuals of 4 kinds age groups who watched in
movie
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a movie
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theater
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in one national European between 2000 and 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was an uptrend in all four groups
during
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11
years
.
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, there were more people
in
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aged 15-24 is the highest
group
in over 11
years
. Regarding
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group
aged 15-24
has
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roughly 15% in the first year,
group
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the group
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aged 35 and over a mere 2%. In the next few
years
,
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group
15-24
was
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rose dramatically to 35% in 2006 and
had
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fluctuated noticeably before
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at over 50% in the
last
year. Meanwhile, the
group
35-over had slightly
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to over 10% in over 11
years
. In terms of people aged 7-14
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10% came
ton
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cinema in the first year, which was twice higher than the percentage of 25-35 viewers. During the given period, a similar pattern was witnessed in both groups
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considerably and both stopped at 30% in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • individuals
  • age groups
  • watched in movie theater
  • national
  • European
  • between
  • 2000
  • 2011
  • describe
  • compare
  • attendance
  • changes
  • summarize
  • chart
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