The given chart below illustrates the proportion of individuals of 4 kinds age groups who watched in movie theater in one national European between 2000 and 2011.

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The given chart below illustrates the proportion of individuals of 4 kinds age groups who watched in

movie

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a movie

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theater

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in one national European between 2000 and 2011.

Overall

, it can be seen that there was an uptrend in all four groups

during

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years

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, there were more people

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aged 15-24 is the highest

group

in over 11

years

. Regarding

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aged 15-24

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roughly 15% in the first year,

group

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the group

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aged 35 and over a mere 2%. In the next few

years

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group

15-24

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rose dramatically to 35% in 2006 and

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fluctuated noticeably before

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at over 50% in the

last

year. Meanwhile, the

group

35-over had slightly

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to over 10% in over 11

years

. In terms of people aged 7-14

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10% came

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cinema in the first year, which was twice higher than the percentage of 25-35 viewers. During the given period, a similar pattern was witnessed in both groups

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considerably and both stopped at 30% in 2011.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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169 words

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