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The maps below shows the center of the small town called birshire as it is now and plan for its development

The maps below shows the center of the small town called birshire as it is now and plan for its development
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The two maps illustrate changes that are
planning
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 for the future
is
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in
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a
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the
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 small
town
 of
Birshire
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Berkshire
.
Overall
, there will have been several extensive changes in terms of demolitions, modernizations, constructions and
expan
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expat
expand
 in
Birshire
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Berkshire
town
. One of the considerable
change
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changes
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 in
Birshire
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Berkshire
town
 will be demolitions. It is expected that Farmer's Market and Griffiths Farm which are
separeted
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separated
 by Corbie
Road
 to the north of
the
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apply
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Birshire
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Berkshire
town
 will be knocked down in the near future. Another striking change that will
be
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occured
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occur
 in
this
town
 will be
modernizations
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modernization
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, one
if
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of
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 which is, the Hoolohan Farm will be flattened to make way for
car
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the car
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 park .
Besides
, The shops
that
is
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are
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 situated to the west of
the
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McGoldrick
road
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Road
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 will be converted into Houses which
is
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are
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benefical
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beneficial
 for the population of
this
town
. Constructions will be
third
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a third
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 change
of
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in
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this
town
. The modern supermarket is expected to be built beside
of
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the
road
 junction
where
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which
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 is located in the north-east of the
town
.
Furthermore
,the
Sport
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Sports
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 Center will be built beside
public
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the public
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 area which is remained unchanged. In the future, housing
area
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areas
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 will be
expended
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expanded
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 with major developments. The
last
Birshire
's plan
depend
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depends
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 on
road
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the road
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. 3 extra roads will be extended to
main
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the main
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 roads.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, birshire, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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