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the plan below show a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make the comparisions where relevant.

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The purpose of
this
 report is to provide data pertaining to changes which took place in a
school
 between 1985 and now.
Overall
, the
school
 has
became
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 much more developed with the zone of more educational and sports facilities.
To begin
 with, on the north side, there is the car park which is adjoining the entrance and the exit. Subsequent change is on the west side, the
school
had
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constructed the library in 1985, and
then
 it was replaced to build the
center
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 for learning, computer room and classrooms.
In addition
, there is the new pool and fitness
center
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has
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 been established to the west of the
school
. One
further
 development is on the left side of the road, there used to be the car park and the classrooms, but it was demolished in 1985.
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Another
Anothet
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Another
 noticeable change is that there was a place
of
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for
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 the
classrooms
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 block with two storeys, but the
school
 has decided to add one
storeys
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 and
also
 built one more
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classrooms
classroom
classroms
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classroom
 on the west
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