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Some people think that parents should limit their children’s time to watch TV and play computer games and encourage them to read books. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by groups of people that parents should only give limited time to their
children
 to activities
such
 as watching TV and playing virtual
games
. Parents
also
 need to make their
children
 read
books
. I completely agree with
this
 statement, because TV and computer
games
 are just addictive wastes of time. And
books
 can give a lot of advantages to our kids. When we are limiting our kids from computer
games
, we are making them less addicted to
such
 things.
For example
, millions of teenagers have already spent more than thousands of hours playing a video game called Counter-Strike.
That is
 Because
this
 game is specially designed to stimulate our dopamine receptors, so we want to spend more time looking at the screen. It is very bad for our brain systems. Recent studies have shown that
this
 sort of addiction makes us more depressed, and sad, and even may lead to suicide.
Instead
, we can give our
children
books
 to read. Reading can make them better in every aspect of our life.
In other words
, they can gain a lot of knowledge from
books
, especially, if they are reading the self-improvement genre. One clear example is a book called "Atomic Habits". By reading it, people always get motivated to do productive things. It helps us organize our days and make our habits useful. Even successful celebrities and authorities recommend reading
this
 book. Recently youtube influencer with the nickname "Eoneguy" published a video, where he says that
this
 book is extremely useful for everyone. In conclusion, we have to set a limit for our
children
 to watch TV shows or play computer
games
.
Instead
, it is much better to make them read. So they can develop themselves.
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