The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007
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graph
below
illustrate
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that
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the several
of
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overseas visitors to three
differ
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different
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areas in a
Europian
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European
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country from 1987 to 2007.Overseas visitors to three different areas show 3
differ
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colour in the
graph
(the coasts
is
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blue,the mountains
is
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are
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orange and the
lakes
is grey).
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,the
graph
show
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that
,
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the
coast
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coastal
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area is the mostly
the
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recipient area between 1987 and 2007(exactly in 1987 was 40
thousand
and in 2007 was 75
thousand
).
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the mountains and the
lakes
was
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were
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20 and 10
thousand
in 1987 and 50 and 35
thousand
was 2007.The
graph
describe
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describes
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that the
lakes
was
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were
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accepted
less
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fewer
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visitors in 1987. The
graph
show
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shows
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that two areas(the
coast
and the
lakess
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lakes
lake
) was
increase
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increased
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with
flactuate
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fluctuate
.
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:in 1987
coast
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the coast
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was 40,
lakes
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and lakes
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was
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were
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10,
however
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,however
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in 1992
coast
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the coast
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was
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decreased to 35 but
lakes
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the lakes
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dramatically increase to 75
thousand
.After the
coast
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cost
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was dramatically raise
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was dramatically raised
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to 75
thousand
between 1992 and the year
of
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apply
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2007.
While
the
lakes
was
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were
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dropp
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drop
dropped
up to the 50
thousand
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, lakes, coast, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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