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You have visited a store and bought set of china tea cups which later you found broken but store denied to replace it. Write a letter to the manager of the store describing situation. In your letter add following points: •State what problem you had with the purchased item. •Complain about the inability of the sales staff to address the problem. •Describe how you want the store to solve the problem to your satisfaction.

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Hello, Dear Mojd, I hope
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 letter finds you well. In
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 essay, I am going to describe the problem
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 happening in your store.
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, I bought a new collection of cups from your store, I was excited to try them,
Therefore
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, I made tea,
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, When I poured tea into the cup, It was leaking from the bottom.
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, The
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 changed because the tea was very hot. And
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, I took the cups to the store where I bought them. I met a man there and I explained to him the problem, But, He did not want to solve
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 problem because he thought
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 my fault. All the staff there could not solve it, Because their skills are very low So I would like you to give a new collection
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 of I bought, And You had better teach your staff how to deal with problems or you will lose customers Thank you, I am looking forward to hearing back from you. Khalid Sincerely

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Try to maintain a more formal tone throughout the letter. For example, avoid informal phrases like 'I hope this letter finds you well.'
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Use clearer paragraphs to separate different points in your letter. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, which helps with clarity.
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Consider elaborating on your feelings regarding the situation to convey the impact it had on you as a customer. This can help strengthen your case.
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You addressed the problem you encountered with the purchased item clearly, which is important for the reader to understand your complaint.
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You clearly stated what you wanted as a resolution, which shows you are proactive in seeking a solution.
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