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Some people believe that giving aid to poorer countries has more negative effects than positive effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree? .

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Nowadays, there are plenty of
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 which are suffering from inappropriate economic situations. Some people argue that assisting them can be associated with more drawbacks in
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 perspective. I strongly believe
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 is not typically the case, as there are a vast number of pros.
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 the fact that the primary right of any child is access to a healthy diet, receiving enough nutrients, and education, I think it is the obligation of both other
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 and individuals to provide them to children in these kinds of
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, economic misfortune and
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 spreading of some life-threatening ailments
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 as AIDS and HPV go hand in hand. eventually, it is proven that an economic downturn can give rise to the escalating rate of crime and particularly juvenile delinquency.
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, if other
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 do not prevent
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 happening it will result in a significant rate of crime throughout the world.
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, definitely, helping them will contribute to some issues. if prosperous
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 or personal individuals or organizations donate money to Nations with terrible financial situations, the inhabitants of those territories and their governments will get used to that.
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, they may not strive to alter their situations.
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, occasionally,
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 donated budget aren't allocated to enhancing their economy or developing various aspects of residents' life.
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, they are allocated to improving the governors' life in these
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. in conclusion,
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 helping
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 which have a poor economy may be disadvantageous, I advocate the view that its benefits outweigh its disadvantages.

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