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In some countries today, there is an attitude that anyone can do it in the arts. As a result, people with no talent bocome rich and famous and geniuine talent is not valued.

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Nowadays, some people believe that anyone is capable of being an artist and the easy possibility of earning a great deal of money or gaining a reputation causes that real artworks are not distinguished or appreciated.
However
, I disagree with
this
 idea. First and foremost, any artwork will not be popular or successful.
In other words
, everyone can do something in arts, but it does not necessarily mean that the final results will gain people's attention or make them a fan.
For example
, many
enthusiastics
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enthusiasts
enthusiastic
 publish their songs but a limited number of them who are truly talented will become famous.
Consequently
, fame and wealth are the final results of a genius artwork.
Furthermore
, the audience can understand the differences between a masterpiece and a regular work of
art
.
Although
 an expert can put more professional comments on artistic works, ordinary individuals who are interested in arts are
also
 aware of hardworking and talents which exist behind the scene.
Thus
, they are most likely to pay for a worthy painting or attend a talented
singer
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 concert. Some argue that artworks are not really valued as it is easy to be an artist and do something in
art
.
However
, I believe the valuation of real
art
 will not be influenced by the increasing number of artists but by its interest. In conclusion, I think nowadays it is not hard to be a musician or an actor but it does not devalue the real works of
art
 as talented people can become famous and distinguished.
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