The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures illustrate the conditions of
air
pollution in Japan, China, Australia, and the USA caused by the usage of electricity generation, vehicles, and industrial activities. It can be clearly seen that Australia have the clearest air
compared to the rest, while
, China is the most polluted country.
Three causes that polluting
Wrong verb form
pollute
the
Correct article usage
apply
Australias'
Change noun form
Australia's
air
is
relatively equal, which is less than 20 PPM. The power plants create a bit higher level than others. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
In addition
, the business industries lead the air
pollution in China with 80 PPM. The transportation
Correct article usage
Transportation
make
the pollution levelCorrect subject-verb agreement
makes
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