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The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures illustrate the conditions of
air
 pollution in Japan, China, Australia, and the USA caused by the usage of electricity generation, vehicles, and industrial activities. It can be clearly seen that Australia have the clearest
air
 compared to the rest,
while
, China is the most polluted country. Three causes that
polluting
Wrong verb form
pollute
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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Australias'
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Australia's
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air
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 relatively equal, which is less than 20 PPM. The power plants create a bit higher level than others.
In addition
, the business industries lead the
air
 pollution in China with 80 PPM.
The transportation
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Transportation
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make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
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 the pollution level
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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