The graph below shows the average monthly use of health club in Miami and Florida by all full-time members in 2017. The pie charts show the age profile of male and female members of this health club.
The bar chart depicts the number of people by gender who had used
health
clubs in Miami and Florida in 2017. The pie charts provide information about the percentage of male and female health
club members by age group
in the same years
.
Overall
, the general trends showed that male users
of fitness centres were always higher than females over the selected period. In terms of age group
, in both men dan women customers, the highest proportion of the members was aged group
21-35 years
.
Looking at the bar chart in more detail, in January 2017, the number of full-time members who used the health
clubs was just over 1000 people, of which the male users
were slightly more than females, at around 560 males. This
number continued to increase and reached its peak in June, with almost 900 males and exactly 700 females using the facilities.
In terms of the aged group
, the largest segment of males who had used the club was the aged group
of 21-45 years
, which accounted for more than half of the total. Similarly
, among female users
, the group
aged 21-45 years
old was the most common health
club users
, accounting for exactly half of the total.Submitted by irarahmawati.polkesma on
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