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In some cultures, the parents arrange marriages for their children but in others, children choose their marriage partner. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each system?

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marriage
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 is a popular Chinese tradition. Some
parents
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 choose to let their children marry whom they want to tie the knot with. There are both pros and cons to both
marriage
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 options. First of all, one of the advantages of
parents
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 deciding who will become their future in-law is that they already know the values and family background of the person whom their child will be marrying.
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, there is
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 a disadvantage of having a fixed
marriage
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. It is disappointing for a daughter to know that she will wed someone she does not even know or love, which may lead to divorce.
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, it is common for a Chinese woman to be partnered with a wealthy businessman chosen by her
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. After their wedding, if their love did not work out, it may lead to a failed married life. Living under one roof without affection for each other will be more likely to go wrong.
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, letting young people decide who they will marry has
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 many benefits. It is better to consider the couple's feelings for each other before letting them become husband and wife. It will help the wedded pair to give importance to the idea of holy matrimony and unlikely to become a broken family. A strong foundation of relationships may be formed before eloping. There are many famous celebrities who rejected their
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' arranged marriages, but they are happier and more successful compared to those who married not
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 their own choices.
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, there are
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 drawbacks to disagreeing to let the
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 choose a partner. Teenagers may pick the wrong spouse if they are being careless and stubborn with their decisions in their lives. In some cases, youngsters need their
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' opinions before eloping their partners, because they tend to make a wrong preference. In conclusion, it is very important for
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 to support their children to choose someone they want to tie the knot with,
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 of arranging them for a fixed
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