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In many countries today, there are people living in poverty. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem?

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In the modern era, there are plenty of
poverty
-stricken
people
 ,especially in developing nations.
This
 is mainly
due to
 uncontrolled population growth and increasing
wealth
 disparity between the rich and the poor. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why
poverty
 exists and practical ways to tackle
this
 dire situation.
People
 living under the
poverty
 line are suffering for many years now. One of the reasons is the poor regulation of the population. With the exponential increase in the number of citizens , the
government
 is unable to fulfil everyone's basic needs
such
 as food, water, shelter, and healthcare which in turn
put
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 less fortunate
people
 on footpaths as they are unable to find means to support themselves and their families. Another reason for
poverty
 is the unequal distribution of a nation's
wealth
. During the COVID pandemic, it was very visible that the rich got richer and the poor got poorer because of a lack of relief supplies from the
government
 in many countries,
such
 as India and Pakistan. To alleviate
this
 problem, the
government
 should ensure equal distribution of a country's profit and provide for the
people
 who cannot afford it. In the UK, healthcare is free,
for instance
, as the
government
 charges hefty taxes from wealthy citizens and
thus
, provides good equality service to everyone.
This
 will lead to
people
 with low to no income, some relief.
Furthermore
, the issue of
poverty
 cannot be dealt with solely by the ruling party. Those who are fortunate in terms of
wealth
 should use it to help the citizens of their country by building schools that provide free education, providing more job opportunities and donating their
wealth
 to NGOs so they are able to use it for the betterment of the
people
 in desperate need.
To conclude
,
poverty
 has been there since the dawn of time;
however
, with joint efforts from the
government
 and affluent ,individuals it can be reduced and possibly eliminated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • unequal distribution of resources
  • financial instability
  • cost of living
  • wage increases
  • ineffective government policies
  • corrupt government policies
  • globalization
  • job losses
  • wage reductions
  • healthcare expenses
  • social inequality
  • discrimination
  • job opportunities
  • earning potential
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