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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Presently,
instead
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 of looking for a job in some companies,
people
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 prefer to build their own businesses.
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 situation often happens since being self-employed is more convenient rather than having to follow so many rules in one organization. Creating a
business
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 is having plenty of benefits. Not only can have flexible work hours
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 but
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people
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 can do their
jobs
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 from anywhere.
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, as a freelancer teacher, I can open private lessons to students in my home and I can adjust the time that is suitable for my schedule.
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, becoming to be self-employed,
people
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 may choose different types of
jobs
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 that it fits with their abilities. Nowadays, so many
jobs
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 can
people
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 do online, just sitting in front of their laptop
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 as working as both
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 and data
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 at the same time.
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, being self-employed has several drawbacks.
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,an unstable income is a significant impact. Since the
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 are not permanent
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 they can fluctuate in earning money. In fact, some duties are available at a certain time and short duration.
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, content creators generate wages when their videos become popular having high views and likes.
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, sometimes building a start-up or owning a
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 has many struggles to survive. To illustrate, when my friend decided to create a small
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. She had to consistent and to be a hard work person to start and develop it. In conclusion, being self-employed is preferable for many
people
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 because of the flexibility. Even though, it has several cons in terms of generating income and struggling to make the
business
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 successful.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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