The obesity rates among teenagers have increased dramatically in many developed countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.
Looking at the recent number of
obesity
among teenagers
, especially in developed countries, has been very concerning. A lot of supporting factors that make this
possibly occur such
as lacking awareness of healthy lifestyle
, massive advertising of fast food
and high sugar food
products
that can cause obesity
as well as
cultural perception
in some countries that 'big is beautiful' that somehow incorrectly preached, though it can boost teenagers
confidence.
Lacking awareness of healthy lifestyles and massive advertising of high-sugar products
might be actually interconnected. With the tight competition among fast-moving consumer goods, many companies, specializing in food
and beverage, consistently bombard our society to keep purchasing their goods. Bombarding society with massive advertising may not be wrong, but conveying the advertisement without a disclaimer that their products
may contain high sugar can be definitely dangerous. Research shows that an unhealthy lifestyle
usually starts from high consumption of sugar products
and worse can cause addiction to our body
. Meanwhile, cultural perception
also
plays a role. We should understand that everyone is different yet beautiful no matter your colour, race, sex, body
size and etc. However
, speaking of body
size, society also
should change their perception
that being big, which is often associated with obesity
, is not always beautiful if the person consistently consumes high-sugar food
without balancing with vegetable consumption, physical exercise, and other healthy lifestyles.
There are some possible solutions that may contribute to decreasing obesity
rates. First,
the government as a policymaker should encourage or even require all companies to also
insert a disclaimer in the advertisement that consuming the products
may cause obesity
in the long run when it is consumed consistently. Just like cigarette products
for adult consumers, I believe the government has successfully applied a great regulation to decrease the consumption of it. In order to change the cultural perception
, definitely takes a longer time than the first one, it can start from school to educate teenagers
about what matters is not body
size, but what matter is about having a healthy lifestyle
. It is okay to be big as long as you have a healthy lifestyle
. In conclusion, the awareness of healthy lifestyles among teenagers
should be significantly improved.Submitted by rashrishrush on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite