The obesity rates among teenagers have increased dramatically in many developed countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.
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perception
in some countries that 'big is beautiful' that somehow incorrectly preached, though it can boost Use synonyms
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confidence.
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might be actually interconnected. With the tight competition among fast-moving consumer goods, many companies, specializing in Use synonyms
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and beverage, consistently bombard our society to keep purchasing their goods. Bombarding society with massive advertising may not be wrong, but conveying the advertisement without a disclaimer that their Use synonyms
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may contain high sugar can be definitely dangerous. Research shows that an unhealthy Use synonyms
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without balancing with vegetable consumption, physical exercise, and other healthy lifestyles.
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the government as a policymaker should encourage or even require all companies to Linking Words
also
insert a disclaimer in the advertisement that consuming the Linking Words
products
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products
for adult consumers, I believe the government has successfully applied a great regulation to decrease the consumption of it. In order to change the cultural Use synonyms
perception
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite