The charts below give information about level of education in Glasglow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.

The charts below give information about level of education in Glasglow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below give information about level of education in Glasglow, a city in Scotland, in 2010.
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The bar chart compares the level of
education
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(university
degree
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, school
degree
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and no qualification) of people with different age
group
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groups

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,
while
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the pie charts give information regarding the standard of
education
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by gender in Glasgow in 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
majority
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the majority

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of the people in Glasgow were university
degree
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holder
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holders

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except
elderly
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the elderly

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aged 75 and over which were mainly holding no formal academic qualification. Apart from that, people with no formal
education
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represented the largest proportion of men and women of all ages in that period of time. With regards to the
age specific
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age-specific

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level of
education
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,
highest
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the highest

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proportion of a
degree
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holder comprised of
adult
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adults

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aged between 24 and 35, which stood at 76%.
In addition
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, young
adult
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adults

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between the ages of 16-24 and
middle-aged
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the middle-aged

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group had
similar
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a similar

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percentage of
degree
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holders (71%).
However
Linking Words

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, only 9% of all the adults below
50 year-old
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50-year-old

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had no formal
education
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.
Also
Linking Words

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,
rate
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the rate

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of elderly with no qualification was strikingly high at 72%. With regards to gender levels of
education
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, men and women with no qualifications comprised of
majority
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a majority
the majority

The noun phrase majority seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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of them with 35% and 38% respectively. Meanwhile, those with
university
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a university

The noun phrase university degree seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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degree
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and school certificate represents approximately
one third
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one-third

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of the populations for both genders

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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, degree with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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