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Many students find it is harder to study at university or college compared to when they were in grade school Why is this? What are some possible solutions for this problem?

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university
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students
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 argue that studying
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college education is more challenging than past.
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 is a common phenomenon rest of the world, it needs sufficient attention from all the professors of education.
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 the mentioned issue and
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 share some suggestions to overcome the matter. The main cause of
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studying
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 environment,
students
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more classes reports and research activities for diverse subjects rather than just
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 homework to
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 in the elementary school.
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,
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 do not have the enough professional skills
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how to write
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academic reports or make a presentation cause them to feel anxious and immense stress in
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 study. Another cause is that the pace of life in
university
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 is fast and stressful, majority
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students
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 have a part-time job in
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 spare time to earn their
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expenses
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 like rent, cost of
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 and tuition
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, it does not simply focus on their schoolwork. If
students
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 not
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self-discipline
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 work and study, they will be
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 and feel
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 to be
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university
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student
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students
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.
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,
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 must feel
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 studying at the
university
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. The mentioned causes could be corrected with
solutions
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 suggested in
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university
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the university
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 ought to set up
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a curriculum
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 about practical approaches
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 communication skills and academic writing for the freshman, school should notice
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, self-learning should be taught since childhood so that kids can overcome various
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 of courses.
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 and most importantly, I consider that learning ought to explore diverse areas rather than focus on academic courses. In conclusion, there are several reasons for
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 situation. Various measures could be taken to improve the situation and help
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 to adapt the new environment
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Self-directed learning
  • Time management
  • Critical thinking
  • Independent study
  • Complexity
  • Academic support
  • Study skills
  • Workshops
  • Orientation programs
  • Financial aid
  • Work-life balance
  • Tutoring services
  • Self-discipline
  • Depth of understanding
  • Higher education
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