Childhood obesity has become a serious problem in recent years. What are the primary causes of this? What measures should be taken to reduce childhood obesity?
Obesity is a real problem which is spreading more and more among children in those years.
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, some little changes can limit the phenomenon.
The major reason for overweight is diet; in fact, many children introduce an exaggerated amount of calories daily. Linking Words
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, they do not eat vegetables and fruits rich in terms of minerals and vitamins because they do not love the taste. Linking Words
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as McDonald and Starbucks - which products are not healthy at all. Their meals are usually fried, and rich in salt and fats. On the other side, the way children of Linking Words
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of going outside and playing with their friends.
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dramatic phenomenon must be the main goal of schools and families. Schools can organize projects in order to give information about the best diet to families, the correct amount of calories and some nice technique to cook vegetables or present fruits to their sons and daughters. In Linking Words
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way, parents can know perfectly the best approach to have with their child to convince them and change their lifestyle. Students should be well informed about the problem coming from excess weight Linking Words
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requires government support: it can start a campaign to reduce the obesity rate.
To summarize, even if it is an extremely diffused phenomenon, obesity can be eliminated from our society. Every country needs a strong and healthy generation because I strongly believe that in healthy bodies there are healthy minds.Linking Words
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