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the chart below shows the number of households in the us by their annual income in 2007, 2011,2015

the chart below shows the number of households in the us by their annual income in 2007, 2011,2015
#households #income
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The bar chart provides information about the number of
families
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 in the
united
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United
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stats
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states
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 according to their yearly income in three specific years measured by
millions
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Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
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number of households who earn 100,000 $ or more was the highest over the given period,
whereas
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families
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 who earn 75,000 to 99,999 $
was
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lowest
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the lowest
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. Looking
in
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 the graph in more detail, in 2007, the number of
families
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 who earn
who earn
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100,000 $ or more was around 29
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millions
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million
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, and in 2011 was slightly declined to almost
to
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27
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millions
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million
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 and in 2015
want
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went
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 up to approximately
to
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33
million
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In contrast
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,
families
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earn
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earned
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 less than 25,000 $ in 2007 was 25
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millions
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million
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 and in increase to almost 29
million
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 and after that in 2015 showed little
droped
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dropped
 to about 26
million
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. Regarding
others
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other
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 categories of income,
families
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 who acquire 75,000 to 99,999 $ approximately remain constant during the given period almost 15
million
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Similarity
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, households who earn 50,000 to 74,999 $ unchanged over from 2007 to 2015
was
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 around 21
million
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Families
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 who earn 25,000 to 49,999 $ in 2007 were around 26
million
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 and
then
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 showed
small
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a small
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increased
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 to 29
million
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 and
then
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want
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went
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 up to almost 27
million
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, millions, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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