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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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A primary goal of
science
 should be to enhance the quality of life for individuals, I believe
this
 point of view because
science
 has benefited people a lot in a wide range of fields
such
 as healthcare. On one hand,
science
 has transformed people’s lives on some positive sides, especially health. Dating back 3 years, throughout the covid 19 pandemic, there were plenty of
science
 companies that provided a few medications to combat the virus. Thanks to the development of
science
, Pfizer
also
 got an opportunity to provide vaccines for residents.
As a result
, everyone can go to public destinations without wearing masks and using hand
sanitizer
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.
Besides
 that, it is rare to see others coughing in
this
 day and age on the street.
On the other hand
,
science
 helps occupants to maintain well-being better by manufacturing more and more functional medications nowadays, especially for the elderly.
Moreover
, it has discovered a variety of new viruses and diseases that can harm people’s health directly.
For example
, covid 19 has caused tons of death and had an enormous impact on the community. From that, they probably provide a ton of solutions and preventions for those to help people avoid.
To sum up
,
science
 is definitely a major aim that should be to benefit people’s lives.
However
, it
also
 helps us to prevent severe illnesses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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