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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below displays the
amount
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number
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 of
inqueries recieved
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inquiries received
 by the Tourist Information Office in a particular city, which spans over six months in 2011. As the data shows, the
inqueries
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inquiries
 vary from being sent by a
person
, letter or mail, or by telephone. During January, telephones were the
go to
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 method
where
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that
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 locals, and mainly tourists use to send out
inqueries
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inquiries
. As the following months come, we can see a trend of
inqueries
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inquiries
 sent by letter or mail slowly decreasing until eventually plummeting to half the amount seen during January. Whilst sending
inqueries
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inquiries
 by telephone or
in
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in-person
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person
 seems to be more popularized as the total amount of
inqueries
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inquiries
 made by telephones doubled, or even quadrupled when it comes to
inqueries
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inquiries
 sent in
person
.
This
 could be
due to
 the high traffic of tourists that the city saw in the next months, which resulted in more
inqueries
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inquiries
. Another
feasable
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feasible
 reason would be because of the eventual decline of using
letter
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letters
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 or mail as it would guarantee a slow response,
in
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which in
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 most
case
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cases
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 does not help the tourist in time.
Whereas
 sending
inqueries
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inquiries
 in
person
 or by telephone would ensure an immediate response.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words inqueries, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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