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In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?

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It is argued that in certain nations youth are not using their right to
vote
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 would hinder the political
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, and it would
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 result in policies made that are not beneficial for these young people. The most viable solutions would be to create awareness among the younger generation and promote them to participate in politics. Not participating in elections would mean that it would be difficult to
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 the government which is necessary for some countries across the globe.
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 is because, in any functional democracy, the only way to
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 the ruling party is by casting votes in the electoral process.
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, if young individuals forge their right to
vote
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, it would result in policies made that do not benefit them.
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, they would feel that the state is not addressing their concerns and end up leaving the country.
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, every year thousands of young adults from developing countries immigrate to Europe and North America because they are unhappy with their government’s performance. One way to tackle these issues is to inform these people about the power of
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vote
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. Campaigns should be held in universities, and colleges to educate youth about their political rights. Another solution is to
promote
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 these young people to come into politics. Doing
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it
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would ensure their representation and their voices being heard.
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, Nelson Mandela was a young political activist who successfully fought against racism and became the first black President of South Africa. In conclusion, neglecting to
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 by the young generation would delay the necessary government
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, and laws made that are not in their
favor
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, encouraging youth participation in politics and awareness campaigns can be
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a possible
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solutions
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 to tackle these problems.
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You have appropriately addressed the task, including identifying problems caused by neglecting the right to vote and providing possible solutions. Support your ideas with specific examples and consider addressing different aspects of the issue for a more comprehensive response.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratic process
  • political instability
  • skewed representation
  • governance
  • erosion
  • civic education
  • alienation
  • policy-making
  • accessible
  • incentives
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