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Life now is better than it was 100 years ago. To what extend do you agree?

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It is true that
life
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this
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 current
time
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 is way better than it was a decade ago. In my opinion ,
i
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 partly agree with
this
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 statement
due to
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 both eras
had
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its
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their
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 own advantages and downsides. On the one hand,living conditions got better with sophisticated technologies that help
to
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 everyday chores or intricate tasks. Nowadays,we can use a washing machine ,
instead
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 of doing it manually.
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,
Internet
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 made
life
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more
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easier with lots of different tools in it.
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,we don'
t
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 have to wait a big amount of
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 to send letters
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 our beloved ones.
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,we don'
t
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 feel that much stress and anxiety
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less
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 problems -
such
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 as
,
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poverty or world war and so forth-as it was 100 years ago.One example
for
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 that, people had to survive during
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this
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these
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 tough times,as my grandmother said that they had to consume food or everyday
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 needs
on
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its
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 bare minimum.
On the other hand
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,we still cannot deny that we face
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 of problems ,
such
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 as bullies on social media or fake
informations
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information
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 about lots of things. But human-being didn'
t
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felt
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 that much strain like
this
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 at that
time
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.
Moreover
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, people spent
time
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 on
another things
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another thing
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 like reading a book or having more
time
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 with their family. As long as we don'
t
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 spend
time
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 on physical activities,we might have more health issues now;than the people that dedicated
time
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 to manual things and acting physically more.
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, I consider both eras have
its
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their
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 good sides and bad sides ,but technologies made today's
life
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 easier than it was ten decades before.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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