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Life now is better than it was 100 years ago. To what extend do you agree?

#life #years
It is true that
life
 at
this
 current
time
 is way better than it was a decade ago. In my opinion ,
i
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 partly agree with
this
 statement
due to
 both eras
had
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having
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its
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their
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 own advantages and downsides. On the one hand,living conditions got better with sophisticated technologies that help
to
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 everyday chores or intricate tasks. Nowadays,we can use a washing machine ,
instead
 of doing it manually.
Also
,
Internet
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 made
life
more
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easier with lots of different tools in it.
For example
,we don'
t
 have to wait a big amount of
time
 to send letters
for
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 our beloved ones.
Additionally
,we don'
t
 feel that much stress and anxiety
due to
less
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 problems -
such
 as
,
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poverty or world war and so forth-as it was 100 years ago.One example
for
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of
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 that, people had to survive during
this
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these
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 tough times,as my grandmother said that they had to consume food or everyday
life
 needs
on
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at
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its
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 bare minimum.
On the other hand
,we still cannot deny that we face
another type
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 of problems ,
such
 as bullies on social media or fake
informations
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information
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 about lots of things. But human-being didn'
t
felt
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feel
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 that much strain like
this
 at that
time
.
Moreover
, people spent
time
 on
another things
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another thing
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 like reading a book or having more
time
 with their family. As long as we don'
t
 spend
time
 on physical activities,we might have more health issues now;than the people that dedicated
time
 to manual things and acting physically more.
To sum up
, I consider both eras have
its
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their
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 good sides and bad sides ,but technologies made today's
life
 easier than it was ten decades before.
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