IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

It is common these days to see celebrities endorsing brand products. Do you advantages outweigh the disadvantages

#celebrities #brand #products
In modern life,it is believed by
people
 that at the moment,it is common for
people
 to prefer the
products
 of celebrities.
This
 statement has both it is own positive and negative sides which will be elucidated
further
 in the
ensuring
Correct your spelling
ensuing
show examples
 paragraphs. Personally, I believe that the advantage
outstrip
Change the verb form
outstrips
show examples
 the disadvantage. On the one hand, if we look at the advantages, they are both obvious and evident. From an
overall
 perspective, the main benefit of celebrity
products
 are much better quality than other
people
's
products
. The next positive aspect. I would like to consider is that the number of
products
.
They
Correct your spelling
The
show examples
 produce is very large. As an illustration of
this
 could be
that
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
different clothes and accessories for different cars.
Hence
,it is
is
Remove the redundancy
apply
show examples
vividly apparent
that
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
why many
people
 approve
this
Change preposition
of this
show examples
 trend. On the other side of the coin, if we consider the disadvantages, they can be both predictable and unpredictable. The
products
 made by celebrities are very expensive nowadays because they can afford it themselves but other
people
 cannot afford
such
products
. From another culture's point of view, another drawback of Receipts
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
 not
issued
Add a missing verb
being issued
show examples
 for goods purchased from celebrities, so many
people
 are starting to avoid buying from them. In conclusion, with the points stated above, I can safely say that
people
 have different views about the merits and demerits. On a more personal level, I strongly believe that the advantage of far greater than the disadvantage.
Submitted by ieltsteaching0 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: