Today many children and teenagers are overweight and unhealthy. Give reasons to explain why many young people are obese and give some solutions to fix this problem.
It is certainly true that today in many countries around the world many
children
struggle with overweight
. There are many reasons for increasing the rate of obesity, and there are several measures Add a missing verb
being overweight
can
Correct pronoun usage
that can
taken
to tackle Change the verb form
take
be taken
this
epidemic.
To being with, there a
various reasons behind Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Correct article usage
the increase
increase
Change the verb form
increasing
the
number of Change preposition
in the
children
who suffer from overweight
. Add a missing verb
being overweight
Firstly
, the
most Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
children
rely on junk food
instead
of prepare
Wrong verb form
preparing
food
on
their Change preposition
in
home
. Fix the agreement mistake
homes
This
is because fast food
is inexpensive,
and available Remove the comma
apply
in
every corner Change preposition
on
on
the Change preposition
of
streets
. Fix the agreement mistake
street
Therefore
, unhealthy food
can contribute to increase
Correct article usage
an increase
Change preposition
in a
a
chance Correct article usage
the
to
Change preposition
of
children
to become
obese, because it Change the verb form
becoming
lack
Change the verb form
lacks
for
essential nutrition, and contains high fat and salt. Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, the
most Correct article usage
apply
children
nowadays , adopt sedentary
lifestyle. Add an article
a sedentary
For example
, children
spend a considerable amount of time in front their
smartphones or playing video games rather than playing outdoor activities. Change preposition
of their
This
is because playing sports namely, swimming, football, tennis
can assist to burn out Correct word choice
and tennis
the
calories and help Correct article usage
apply
children
to stay healthy.
Regarding solutions, the first measure, the
governments should launch educational campaigns and workshops to raise awareness among Add a missing verb
is the
children
in order to educate children
abour
Correct your spelling
about
harmful
of Correct article usage
the harmful
eat
junk Change the verb form
eating
food
. The second solution, authorities should encourage children
to playing
sports by offering incentives. Change the verb form
play
For instance
, the governments
can Fix the agreement mistake
government
gives
every child access to Change the verb form
give
doing
exercise Unnecessary verb
apply
on
Change preposition
in
gym
for free, which Add an article
the gym
a gym
this
can motivate Correct pronoun usage
apply
children
to doing
work out.
Change the verb form
do
To sum up
, the major reasons behind increasing the percentage of overweight among
Change preposition
apply
children
are unhealthy and inactive lifestyle
, Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
however
there are many solutions can take by Add a comma
,however
the
lawmakers to motivate Correct article usage
apply
children
to stay healthy including , introuce
harsh laws, Correct your spelling
introduce
introduced
encourage
the Wrong verb form
encouraging
playing
sports.Change the verb form
to play
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