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Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily? Do you agree or disagree?

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There are people with different opinions about how the government can reduce airlines and ensure they get to use other means of transportation by imposing high taxes on
such
 businesses. I believe that it is the duty of every organization to work toward a sustainable environment.
Thus
, I completely agree with the statement.
To begin
 with, the traffic is beginning to have its environmental effect on the world at large.
Although
, it is said that air pollution is affecting the species of birds in the sky and
also
 noise pollution can not be overemphasised on how it affects every single individual.
Thus
 the earth is beginning to degenerate because of its fume and
for example
, we are now experiencing more floods than before. It has become paramount for the people in power to do more about educating society about a sustainable way of life without creating more problems for the next generation.
Firstly
, other means of transportation need to be explored.
Secondly
, more funding for research will be required to understand what can be done.
On the contrary
, travelling by air is one of the easiest and fastest means of transportation to go around the world. So, people will continue to pay to get to their destination faster even if they have to pay more. Some obviously do not understand the risk and the gravity of their decisions. These set of individuals are only worried about plane crashes and it is devastating effects.
Nonetheless
, I strongly agree that more should be done to reduce the traffic. There is only one earth and it is everyone's responsibility to keep it safe.
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