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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
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Technology
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 is taking part in every aspect of different fields of work.
Due to
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this
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, more and more jobs are emerging in different sectors. With regards to
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, some people believed that these
days
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 we have numerous
options
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. From my perspective, I believe that
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 it is true that nowadays we have many
options
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 to choose
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However
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, not every choice leads us to a
successfull
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successful
 life. On the one hand, a boon in
technology
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 creates many aspiring
options
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 in different fields of work.
In other words
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, unlike conventional
choices
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 of work, these
days
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 there are
such
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 positions open which are not there in the past.
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, machine learning is present in the world
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 years but
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 field is evolving these
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 at a higher level. All of
this
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 is possible because of the advent of the
technology
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.
Hence
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,
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 world helps people to have various
choices
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.
In contrast
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, not all the different
options
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 present nowadays will take you to have a
successfull
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successful
 life. To be more precise, it is true that
technology
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 and
artifical
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artificial
 intelligence creates a list of
options
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 for us but not every choice is in demand.
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, opportunities related to e-commerce are increasing but certain statistics have mentioned that
this
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 trend will soon fall because of
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 number of people choosing it.
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, there are numerous opportunities present these
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 but all of them are not promising as
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. To summarise, opportunities are rising these
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, creating a world of new and different
choices
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.
However
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, I believe that each of them
are
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 not promising or leads to a life of dreams. With
regards
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 to
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the future
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, we can predict that these
choices
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 will continue to rise and evolve with time.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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