The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place.

The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place.
The graphs eliminate the population in various nations who are willing to consume
insect
products
,
along with
it, the comparison of the price between
insects
and other nutrition sources.
Overall
, there are three surveyed countries that indicate more than half of the population would like to eat
insects
, compared to others which are less than 50%.
On the other hand
, the majority of
insect
products
are more expensive than the food people have on
the
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daily basis, except
female
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giant water bugs. Mexico, Peru and Thailand are three countries that accounted for a large number of residents who are willing to eat
insect
products
, at 71%, 58%, and 56% respectively.
In contrast
, only 21% of participants in Japan would like to try
products
made by
insects
.
On the other hand
, the costs of
insects
are relatively high, in which the price of wild Bombay Locust per kilogram is 7.8 USD, ten times higher than Thai rice. Among all
insect
products
, only the female giant water bug is cheaper than beef, which is the most expensive daily food, at 2.6 USD per kilogram.
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