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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives
Many
people
 in their work get several risks in their personality
life
 or job
life
,
although
,there are public do
things
 stupid and dangerous on their
life
,but many jobs in the world want our sacrifices and it useful for
people
,l believe
this
 that advantage it outweighs any disadvantages.
On the other hand
,there are occupations in the world not to be easy but it nifty for humans hood , those jobs
people
 have big ability and knowledge in that matters ,Avoid those risks ,particularly job police and Explosive experts and firemen , as they are loss of
life
 for protect us and make us save ,
also
 in education several children in poor countries were
way
 dangerous but they are desire education
for example
 in Africa not there
way
 for school so that the students' access
way
 from the river by the bridge it is feeble.
On the other hand
,a lot of public lost their
life
 for ridiculous
things
 or experience do not useful just for watching YouTube or challenges hard on any human,I think that
way
 to get an income without securing their save on
life
 is very painful ,those
people
 do not realize awful that
things
 and they have an impact on teenagers and children because copying them,
for example
,there is a person on YouTube doing challenges eating
things
 very spicy to the point same person started crying because heat so become have teenagers curious for trying and in ,
result
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inresult
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 they don’t endure it done took them for the hospital. In conclusion,
as a result
,
Whereas
,there are risks without true aim , in my ,view the positive side outweighs the negative side because we need
people
 who have power and wisdom to save our
life
 and children .
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