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Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that advanced
technology
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 has brought individuals together,
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 others state that it has separated us.
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 the development of devices causes human
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 to overlook others and has an effect on isolation, I believe that it combines us. On the one hand, the advancement of
technology
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 has had a certain impact on the separation of people and has attracted individuals to spend their
time
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 differently.
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, it has led to men and women spending their
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 on social media rather than interacting with others;
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, potentially dividing them.
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, it is increasingly common for human
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 to use their mobile phones and spend
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 browsing social media
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 of engaging in conversations with their friends during social gatherings.
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, I consider that all these habits are dependent on personal choices rather than solely
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.
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, today's advanced devices enable communities to get together wherever they are.
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 is to say that many online meeting platforms provide society with an opportunity to have a conversation together, even if they are in remote places from each other.
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,
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 aids human
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 in getting together in every situation.
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, many people meet with foreign citizens to develop their language skills by connecting to these platforms,
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 as Skype.
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, I believe that
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 makes it easier to get together for communities. In conclusion, despite the development of smartphones and other devices that can have an impact on individuals' isolation, I do not believe that they are solely responsible for
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 isolation. In fact, they provide ample opportunities for human
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 to connect and spend
time
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 together effectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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