In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
education
at
home
gaining popularity. Parents are more likely to
study
at
home
for a lot of reasons. There are some drawbacks and benefits of it,
such
as safety and social activity.
Home
teaching can be more suitable if the child has some problems with development and social skills. In
this
situation, parents are aware of the special treatment their child needs.
This
way, they can provide viscerally circumstances and prevent deterioration of problems.
For instance
, special
children
can become victims of bullying. Some pupils are cruel, they humiliate others for different behaviour. In
this
situation, it's better to teach
children
at
home
for the reason of avoiding future psychological problems.
Additionally
, there is another significant advantage of
home
teaching.
This
is more attentive to teachers. School teachers have a lot of tasks and pupils to teach.
Following
this
, they don't have
opportunity
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to pay attention and find
approach
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for everyone. That's why, a lot of
children
don't
study
at all.
In contrast
to that,
children
who
study
at
home
have all attention.
As a result
, they have more qualified
education
On the other hand
, schools have some
privilege
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too,
such
as a social environment and a certified
education
system. School is not only a
study
place, it's
also
a place where you can learn to be part of society. The
children
are surrounded by people of their age, it helps them to develop normally. Another thing, parents can make up schedules by themselves and remove important subjects. It is
inappropriate
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way of teaching.
In contrast
to
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schools have an exact system
that is
tested by professionals. Taking everything into account, there is the advantage of
home
teaching
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,
such
as the quality of
education
and disadvantages,
such
as the lack of needed social circumstances and a suitable system. Personally, I think there are more benefits and it's better to teach
children
at
home
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