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In many countries good schools and medical facilities only available in cities. Some people believe that new teachers and doctors should work in rural area for few years, but some think everyone should be free to choose where they work, discuss both and give opinion.

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Nowadays, excellent institutes and health facilities are only available in urban
areas
 in many nations.
According to
 a few folks, for some period modern tutors and health workers should work in countryside regions
while
 some opines that it is up to them where they want to work. I believe that advanced educators
as well as
 clinicians should help the local
areas
 in the case of learning institutes and hospitals by doing jobs over there. To commence with, instructors and wealth workers have great knowledge than the volunteers in rural
areas
. To elaborate on
this
, they completed their studies and training where the technology is of high level. If they do their duties over there, there would be great support for the children at the same time for the people of the backward community.
For instance
, a couple of years ago, a team of schoolmasters from the Metropolitan region visits a village and they found that the level of education
as well as
 knowledge of kids is really down
than
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to
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 the students in urban
areas
.
However
, there are so many reasons to do a job
according to
 their own wish as they spent so much money on their study and training. But working in countryside
areas
, they have to face a lot of financial problems. The amount of salary they will get is much lower than they spent on their education
while
 working in lower sides.
For example
, a survey taken by Delhi in 2020, in which they found that about 78% of the latest instructors and doctors prefer to do their service on the municipal side. In my opinion, I agree with the persons said that associates should work for some time in local towns. With
this
, there would be a great assistance for the juveniles to develop their study base well and support humankind in giving good treatment cases of medical facilities.
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