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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#internet #access #information
Internet
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 is growing in
a
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apply
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rapid
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rapidly
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 phase,
enable
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enabling
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 us to know
occurrence
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the occurrence
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 of any international events within a few seconds. I believe that it is a positive development
,
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 because it helps
people
 to have effective communication and access to all
information
 faster than before.
On the other hand
, it makes
people
to
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feel socially insecure by spreading false
information
 sometimes. Primarily,
increase
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the increase
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 in smart gadgets
make
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makes
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people
's life easier as they have access to all data. Nowadays,
information
 travels faster than light with the help of online social tools
such
 as Facebook,
twitter
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Twitter
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,
Instagram
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and Instagram
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. It is easy for friends and family to stay connected with each other even though they live across the ocean. It
also
 helps
people
 to learn new things
on
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in
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a
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their
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 day-to-day life. It provides
huge
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a huge
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 platform for
people
 to share their knowledge.
For example
, in 2019 when a world runaway in lockdown cancelling all
medium
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mediums
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 of transportation
.
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were.
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Internet
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The Internet
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 is
only
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the only
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 medium that gave hope to the family whose
closed
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close
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 ones live over the seas. Unequivocally, there is
also
negative
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a negative
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 impact
due to
this
 social communication, it is easy to connect
anyone
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to anyone
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 around the world with just a phone, but it
also
 affects
social
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the social
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 security of
individual
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individuals
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. Nowadays since we can know everything
in
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at
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a
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the
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 touch of
button
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a button
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, which arises a question of
credibility
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the credibility
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 of the
information
.
For instance
, In
Russia-Ukraine
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the Russia-Ukraine
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war
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,war
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 it is said
the
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that
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 social media has generated a wealth of disinformation as both countries use social media to discredit each other and influence global opinion.
To conclude
,
Internet
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the Internet
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 influences
people
 more in the near future, Despite
of
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apply
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the fact that online medium is somewhat socially insecure,
but
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apply
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it is
individual
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the individual
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 responsibility to use these in
effective
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an effective
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 way of communication and spreading knowledge.
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