Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important.

These days people

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control of their health by adjusting their diet and others use more physical activity because exercise is beneficial. People have different views regarding the question of how to dietary

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health. To my

mind

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This

essay will discuss both viewpoints and provide inferences as to why a balanced meal should be given more importance.

To begin

with, the more people walk in the fresh

air

and do physical

exercises

, the more their mind and body can benefit from the fresh

air

, because scientists

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that fresh

air

is the best medicine.

therefore

, if a

person

always and every morning does physical

exercises

in the fresh

air

, he will never get sick. If he does physical education and physical

exercises

, he will not get sick and will be refreshed all day long.

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, a balanced diet consisting of proportionate carbohydrates and proteins has always been a shortcut to good health because these practices have been followed since ancient times when cardio activities like aerobics,

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yoga were not known. In the fact that physical activity helps when a

person

consumes healthy food. if a

person

does not eat

healthy

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, no matter how much he

exercises

, it will not help him. Because healthy food hygiene is one of the characteristics of a

person

. In conclusion, in order to maintain a balanced life, both nutritious food and physical exercise should be carried out at the same time. Because these two are the same, they go side by side.

However

, a slight priority must be given to one's diet, so that she can build her physique to challenge any type of physical work. Word count: 278

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

Cardiovascular health
Metabolism
Chronic diseases
Immune system
Mental well-being
Nutrients
Malnutrition
Obesity
Type 2 diabetes
Circulation
Nutrient distribution
Preventive health
Energy levels
Balanced diet
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Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be shut down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.

Government investment in the arts,such as music and theatre is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public service instead. Do you agree or disagree.

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These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that we learn best through in-person interaction with a teacher in a classroom. Others believe that online learning is more effective. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.